Create an outline after making a good paragraph
Introduction Paragraph (1st Paragraph)
- Thesis statement : In my leisure time, there are three of my favorite activities to get rid of boredom in my leisure time.
2nd Paragraph
- Topic Sentence : The first activity is singing my favorite songs.
- Major support 1 : I really like to sing to acoustic song.
- Minor supports :
- Acoustic song solely or primarily uses acoustic string instruments.
- Major support 2 : I usually sing any favorite songs by John Mayer, Nadin Amizah, and Adhitya Sofyan songs.
- Minor supports :
- "-stars" by Nadin amizah, "New Light" by John Mayer, and "Forget Jakarta" by Adhitya Sofyan are the list of my favorite song.
- Major support 3 : By singing my favorite songs, I can express my feeling and feel relieve which made me enjoy my leisure time.
- Conclusion sentence : Singing to my favorite song is the first activity that i like to do in my leisure time.
3rd Paragraph
- Topic Sentence : Watching movies or TV series is the second favorite activity.
- Major support 1 : I love to watch romance and comedy genre of movie.
- Minor supports :
- It bring me joy and easy to understand because the plot is usually not really complex and easy to understand.
- Major support 2 : Other than that, I really like to watch action and mystery genre of TV series
- Minor supports :
- It brings me challenge to predict their next story or action after seeing a problem.
- Major support 3 : By watching movies or TV series, I can learn about many good values which I could practice in my daily life.
- Minor support sentence :
- I can learn about the advantage of being wise in choosing something in life and being careful in taking any decision because it can bring much impact to my life.
- Conclusion sentence :Enjoying the story of life by watching movies or TV series is my second favorite activity.
4th Paragraph
- Topic Sentence : The last thing I love to do is dancing.
- Major support 1 : Copying the choreography from Korean girl or boy band and from international choreographer is really.
- Minor supports :
- I usually dance to BTS, I*Zone, Red Velvet and many other korean girl or boy bands' choreography.
- Matt stevanina's choreography is choreography that I love to copy.
- Major support 2 : My favorite international choreographer is Matt Stevanina
- Minor supports :
- Matt always packs up his choreography into easy but looks complicated movements..
- Major support 3 : Other than that, i also love to dance to my hometown traditional dance, which is Balinese dance.
- Minor supports :
- Since i learn about Balinese dance in kindergarten, I can say that dancing to Balinese dance is my hobby.
- I can dance and keep my culture as Balinese people.
- Conclusion sentence : Move my body to the song with specific choreocraphy is my third favorite activity.
Conclusion Paragraph (5th Paragraph)
- Conclusion Sentence : By singing, watching movies or TV series, and dancing, I can enjoy my leisure time really nice without getting disturbed by the feeling of boredom.
Create an essay after making the outline
Three Favorite Activities
In Wikipedia.com, Leisure time is time spent away from business, work, job hunting, domestic chores, and education, to do recreation which can refresh your mind. Leisure has often defined as free time. People tend to enjoy their leisure time to spoil themselves to do their favorite activities. In my leisure time, there are three of my favorite activities to get rid of boredom.
The first activity is singing my favorite songs. I really like to sing acoustic song. Acoustic song primarily uses acoustic string instruments. I usually sing any favorite songs by John Mayer, Nadin Amizah, and Adhitya Sofyan songs. "-stars" by Nadin amizah, "New Light" by John Mayer, and "Forget Jakarta" by Adhitya Sofyan are the list of my favorite song. By singing my favorite songs, I can express my feeling and release stress which made me enjoy my leisure time. Singing to my favorite song is the first activity that i like to do in my leisure time.
Watching movies or TV series is the second favorite activity. I love to watch romance and comedy genre of movie. It brings me joy and easy to understand because the plot is usually not really complex and easy to understand. Other than that, I really like to watch action and mystery genre of TV series. It brings me challenge to predict their next story or action after seeing a problem. By watching movies or TV series, I can learn about many good values for my daily life. I can learn about the advantage of being wise in choosing something in life and being careful in taking any decision because it can bring much impact to my life. Enjoying the story of life by watching movies or TV series is my second favorite activity.
The last favorite thing to do is dancing. Copying the choreography from Korean girl or boy band and from international choreographer is really challenging. I usually dance to BTS, I*Zone, Red Velvet and many other Korean girl or boy bands' choreography. Matt Stevanina's choreography is choreography that I love to copy. My favorite international choreographer is Matt Stevanina. Matt always packs up his choreography into easy but looks complicated movements. Other than that, i also love to dance to my hometown traditional dance, which is Balinese dance. Since i learn about Balinese dance in kindergarten, I can say that dancing to Balinese dance is my hobby. I can dance and keep my culture as Balinese people. Move my body to the song with specific choreography is my third favorite activity.
In summary, by singing, watching movies or TV series, and dancing are my favorite activity to enjoy my leisure time. Singing my favorite songs can express my feeling and release my stress. Watching someone's story through movie or TV series is my second favorite activity. Move and dance my body with hip-hop and Balinese dance song is my third favorite activity. I can enjoy my leisure time really nice without getting disturbed by the feeling of boredom.

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ReplyDeletefor me, i didn't find any mistakes or something that you miss it. Your essay and the outline already good and correct. Good job sita!
Hi Sita, your introductory paragraph and concluding paragraph on the outline seems not complete yet. I suggest you to adding introduction sentences before thesis statement and your concluding paragraph on outline should be same with the essay, so not only 1 sentence. Keep spirit ^^
ReplyDeleteHallo sita, your essay is stuctured and good. You can add introduction sentences. Thank you
ReplyDeleteGreat! You explain well and show the structure of the essay correctly.
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I like the way you explain it into essay. Your essay has a correct structure and the outline already clear. Good job!
ReplyDeleteits a good essay, good job sita!!
ReplyDeleteHello sita. I like your essay. It's a good story. But may i correct in your outline you didnt give some tipoc sentences and lead in to thesis in the introduction paragraph. So i suggest you to put into your outline, in order to make it clear your essay too. But overall completed and structured. Good job sit!!!
ReplyDeleteHai sita, your essay is already good enough! And i really like the way you tell your favorite activities. Lets do your fav activities together! :)
ReplyDeleteHai Sita, i like the way you explain the essay, your essay is very clear. GoodJob :)
ReplyDeleteHi sita, I like your essay it's structure already good... Good job girl 👍
ReplyDeleteHello Sita, your essay is already good and structured. but i guess maybe you need to add more in introduction paragraph
ReplyDeleteHai sita, you explain your activitie very detailed, and your outline good structure. good job girl :)
ReplyDeleteYour essay is really good, the major and minor supports make the reader can easily understand the topic. The structure also great, really neat. But, I think it would be better if you delete the word "by" at the concluding paragraph.
ReplyDeletei like your essay mogek! and i love dancing and singing as well keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteI think your essay and outline already clear enough. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHi, Sita! I like the way you explain it into an essay.It was so fun and easy to read! Your essay has a good structure and for the introduction in the outline, i suggest you to make some point and divide the sentence about which is topic introduction --> lead in to thesis ---> thesis sentence. so the reader can read it clearer! Good job! ❤
ReplyDeleteYour essay and outline was good. Good job!
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